It starts slowly, deep within
From the very depths of the soul
The twisted sinews of a heart wounded
Unhealing scars that take their toll
Blades flashing, the oppresors ravag'd
As he stood helplessly watching
The behemoths smiled with blood-stained teeth
As he felt in his veins the boiling
He shudders at the memory
Of the pain, blood and gore
A blood-curling vengeance takes shape in his mind
He will leave them tattered and torn
He feels not the pool of blood
In which he was left to die
A grim smile spreads over his lips
At the knowledge that he will survive
Strange how Anger gives us strength
In times when all goes wrong
'Tis anger that lends the tune
And meaning to life's morbid song
Jigsaw
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A story of a angry person portrayed through blood and gore ... well told in all aspects... coverd all points u have!! i must say somplete to my knowledge of writing stuff... though i felt tht the meaning of anger that is the last para could be extendend to two paras u see the escence of the poem is the last para i would have liked it if there were two paras talking abt ANGER itself...but i must say super naveen super duper
its powerful.. and empowering.. loved reading it..
:) hats off naveen i really liked it... looking forward to the rest!
its intense... i like the dimension u'v given to the emotion...
quoting you
"Strange how Anger gives us strength
In times when all goes wrong
'Tis anger that lends the tune
And meaning to life's morbid song"
I completely agree with these lines for it brings out pure passion and energy. Loved the way you word anger.
Four emotions a.k.a. seasons Anger, Envy, Loneliness and Fear. And what a start off with Anger, the most morbid emotion that man can express. Bring the rest on, can't wait to see how you going to make it this intense.
wah waha....bahut uttam....apne gusse ko bahut acchi trah se kavita ke madhyam se prastoot kiya hai.....kabil-e-tarif
Avinash Khemka
Amazing. Waiting for the rest!
its really cool! i mean its really deep and its a bludy powerful poem
- shilpa!
'Tis anger that lends the tune
And meaning to life's morbid song"
i loved the end :)
glorifying anger, but what the hell it is the truth :)
Ditto to everything above. I like the meter of your fourth verse.. it really matches the words. Or maybe I'm just into blood and gore, who knows :) Cant wait for loneliness.
Cool stuff man .... u turing out to be a greta poet man
Thank you all......The next "Season" will be up soon......Looking forward to your support
unrealistic....gory and very very...red. thats all i cud see throughout the read.
did the oppressor rape his lady love?
and the man seemed kind of 'evil' in my mind when he "smiled" while lying in a "pool of blood."
revenge is solid. sacred. over the death of a loved one.
and all anger will do, is screw it up. because u lose ur control when u get angry....rite?
seems to me like ur poem is abt revenge, not anger.
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